This week we have a strange group invading the wood!
As we trudged through the woods on our ‘exciting’ nature walk I felt a something that made the hair on the back of my neck stand up straight. A spindly, hard hand tickled my arm. Like it was made out of wood. But I knew better. I knew it was alive.
I thundered to the front of the line to consult the nature walk instructor. “Hello, I wanted to-” I began to say before she started again. “This week we have a strange group invading the wood!” She explained. “But be warned they are very dangerous. They can injure or even kill you. So stay away at all costs-” She continued before she got interrupted by a very violent scream. Then everything went black.
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Please comment saying if you like it or not as I would like to know how to improve! And now here is a cute picture of my cat Coco!
Bye!
Was that you screaming, Emily? You have challenged yourself to add intensity to your work. There are a few places that you could identify to use full stops. Your vocabulary is specific and you have added a conversation to give more detail.
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